Sweet
Submitted by ana on Sun, 01/11/2009 - 4:56pm.
as I put my feet up on the coffee table
(no coffee served here for years, now)
ready to relax
feel you
need you
crave you...
smoke you
inhale you...
light you
(not by lighter, but match)
(matches are better, and smell great after extinguishing)
I think of the tasteful journey I'm about to embark on
the deep feeling of you inside my lungs
full flavor
gentle flavor
savor
I want to smoke you for hours
feel you take over my brain
chemical balancing act
within me
tangled in my brain waves
you tickle my cells with your fingertips
and I exhale you into the room
and smell you for weeks after I'm done with you.
love it. i should stop
love it. i should stop smoking...
nice
this gave me an excellent picture in my mind. I like it...
life is full of possibilities and the thrill of the unknown is so great.
this is really great. god i
this is really great. god i feel like i have written these same words. the feelings that inspire such work are amazing.. right.
The only suggestions i have are... i would remove the whole lighter and matches bits. And i might change:
"full flavor
gentle flavor
savor"
to
"full flavor
gentle
savor"
kind of like the way it flows better this way. I don't know it is just a thought.
thanks for posting... i really enjoyed this piece