Submitted by no_exit on Thu, 01/17/2008 - 10:40am.
the second one is a pretty good image, and the language flows real nicely. the first one, though, has a real good twist to it (so to speak.) I like them both - they make me want to write haiku. So, of course, I'm delighted to read them. Which is what poetry's all about, if you ask me. Good to see you writing Janet!
I don't consider myself much of a haijin - at all - but I wrote these quickly, and for fun, a few months ago in response to someone else's senryu at a blog. Even though I don't really "know how" to write proper ku, a few fellow writer-types seem to have liked these, so I guess they have at least served "a purpose." ;)
I'm not writing too much (or commenting too much either) - just a tiny bit from time to time. Have been preoccupied with some time-consuming stuff.
Nice
the second one is a pretty good image, and the language flows real nicely. the first one, though, has a real good twist to it (so to speak.) I like them both - they make me want to write haiku. So, of course, I'm delighted to read them. Which is what poetry's all about, if you ask me. Good to see you writing Janet!
Hello there - and thanks for
Hello there - and thanks for your comments.
I don't consider myself much of a haijin - at all - but I wrote these quickly, and for fun, a few months ago in response to someone else's senryu at a blog. Even though I don't really "know how" to write proper ku, a few fellow writer-types seem to have liked these, so I guess they have at least served "a purpose." ;)
I'm not writing too much (or commenting too much either) - just a tiny bit from time to time. Have been preoccupied with some time-consuming stuff.
Glad to see MUG's activity!