Misplaced in Paradise
Submitted by skywalker on Wed, 12/08/2010 - 1:53am.
On silence
like fancy clips
I see you passing
away
Then dancing
I keep you in mind;
another day and
just me here..
trapped in paradise
I ran over treachery
again.
on warm breeze
Im feeling the slight
rub of your lips
underneath this sun
without experiencing
that kiss.
another day looking
into blue skies
and I cant hear
your voice
in the middle of
this green,
in the middle of
breaking waves.
this is an awfully
this is an awfully well-written poem Skywalker. except for the typos of course. but then, if I remember correctly, you're from Costa Rica, right?
oh awfully : ) hehe:
Yes i am latina. whats poetry about? expressing something on your way(artistic).I did. i expressed a simply feeling that anyone could experience -not a really truthful feeling,not the best of the emotions...=daydreaming...-but yes i figured how to place some elements movements,colors and sensations to that illusion...about typos...some day i am not going to be mistaken.Thank God for the learning process!.: P
oops ...
... in the American dialect, "awfully" doubles as a superlative, in other words it is an adjective that contextually can mean something like "extremely." (sort of like the word "terrible" in French having the familiar meaning of "terrific") So, what I meant to say was: "this is an extremely well-written poem." And by that I mean, your use of imagery wrapped in affective statements and built through the poetic structure is extremely effective. Meaning, I like this poem quite a bit.
[Your "learning process," I would say, is coming along very nicely.]
opps no_exit. Apologize my ignorance please. Greetings.
: )