the getaway (mended)
Submitted by softserve on Thu, 11/29/2007 - 11:46pm.
one bead of sweat
lin-
gers
on the edge of
Alligator's
long
dark
grimace,as
the light
turns green; each hungry
eye focuses
on its respective
side of the
oldsmobile
while his
foot grad-
ually
moves from
the brake to-
wards the
gas
and his he-
avy
eyelids
drape
down
for a
blink
...the world's largest
butterscotch sundae melts
inconspicuously
in the backseat.

you never cease to amaze me
you never cease to amaze me with
timing.
Very Nice!
Great visuals! Very unusual, to say the least, but I really enjoyed the unique voice in this work.
Tangibles always resonate with me; concrete poetry is my concubine!
The surrealistic element was equally cool. The 2nd stanza is my favorite.
Keep it comin'!