what If
Submitted by wabipenache on Sat, 04/24/2010 - 5:32pm.
Just when I thought
i could go on forever
dancing in frequencies
bodies minds blending beating
heart
blood pumping as psychedelic light
riding the wind
pushing the edge
living in the moment
falling flat on face bricks
freaking
freak accident
guilty of neglect
unconsciously
what if
it could have been
the end of my friend
and my friendship
"face bricks" eh? The first
"face bricks" eh? The first stanza sets this up well. very manic, but with consequences.
Thank you for noticing my
Thank you for noticing my poem, I have been through some changes and as you can tell so has my poetry. I hope this new step is in the right direction.
I always read your poetry -
I always read your poetry - whether I comment or not. But, yeah, I noticed the changes in your approach to poetry and I like them. I imagine that studying cinema at a university level has a positive influence in that regard.
Thanks again no exit
I guess the change in my life has really affected things, my new freedom and relationships or should I say non- relationships have worked out well I guess, most of the time, it is working well now. ;)Thank you again. Wabi